Wednesday, February 25, 2009

Summary Ledes 4 &5

4. A possible state bill can help lower Towson's risk of being a victim of identity theft which exceeds the national average.

5. The Towson school district leads in the effort to help at-risk youths with its Community Helping Hands program receiving $1.2 million in aid from the total $30 million federal grant money.

1 comment:

  1. Nice ledes here, Elena. Both are one sentence and active voice. Two suggestions: 1) in #5, can you get the news (the grant) into the lede? and 2) In #4, can you simplify the sentence structure? (Call me over and I'll explain what I mean here.)

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